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枫下拾英 / 心情随笔 / 缘何仲夏觉微寒,暖意何堪一指弹。鱼跃龙门仙骨去,鹿迁桃洞道风端。潜风燕雀希鸣啭,点水蜻蜓少逐欢。月色朦胧当最美,休欺潭景色斑斓。
-zhangqilxf(双子心-今夕何夕);
2008-5-12
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精华!鱼跃龙门仙骨去,鹿迁桃洞道风端。。。随社而动;-)
-ddli(路上躺在驴车上晒太阳);
2008-5-12
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屁精
-conghua1(打卤面);
2008-5-12
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:-((((((( 你个精屁 走了!
-ddli(路上躺在驴车上晒太阳);
2008-5-12
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也像唧唧歪歪是顶着风走的?
-conghua1(打卤面);
2008-5-12
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精辟
-conghua1(打卤面);
2008-5-12
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一朵花。。。 -zhangqilxf(双子心-今夕何夕); 13:01 (#4448175@0)
-conghua1(打卤面);
2008-5-12
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你这个500分。。。
-zhangqilxf(双子心-今夕何夕);
2008-5-12
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这样的贴子要顶~~~~
-pfans(曼夫子);
2008-5-12
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一个蘑菇。。。
-zhangqilxf(双子心-今夕何夕);
2008-5-12
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这样的贴子要顶~~~~ -pfans(曼夫子);
-jjyy-jjyy(能吃能睡);
2008-5-12
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一个金币。。。
-zhangqilxf(双子心-今夕何夕);
2008-5-12
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差点儿漏过这个!好诗!
-lookaround(与北京奥运共荣衰);
2008-5-12
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诗挺烂的,实话而已。。。。。。
-zhangqilxf(双子心-今夕何夕);
2008-5-12
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不过歪歪说的对,如无好句,就写七绝,不一定非写七律。(他当时批评我的话,我觉得有道理)
-lookaround(与北京奥运共荣衰);
2008-5-12
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这样的贴子要顶~~~~ -pfans(曼夫子)
-newwhite(小新);
2008-5-12
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一朵花。。。
-zhangqilxf(双子心-今夕何夕);
2008-5-12
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重字太多,改改。。。//缘何仲夏觉微寒,暖意不堪一指弹。鱼跃龙门仙骨去,鹿迁桃洞道风端。潜空燕雀希鸣啭,点水蜻蜓少逐欢。月色朦胧当最美,休欺潭景任斑斓。
-zhangqilxf(双子心-今夕何夕);
2008-5-12
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起笔不好,后面都好
-jjyy-jjyy(能吃能睡);
2008-5-12
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那怎么起???
-zhangqilxf(双子心-今夕何夕);
2008-5-12
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我不知该怎么起,只是谈谈感觉.总觉得诗的开头,应该象小曼那样: 一山一水俱为师,山水多情纵我痴~~
-jjyy-jjyy(能吃能睡);
2008-5-12
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一朵花。。。 -zhangqilxf(双子心-今夕何夕); 13:01 (#4448175@0)
-conghua1(打卤面);
2008-5-12
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我倒觉得头两句不错,但中间两联寄意似不县。
-pfans(曼夫子);
2008-5-12
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这样的开头显得匆忙
-jjyy-jjyy(能吃能睡);
2008-5-12
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你当年给小草那首,略近此格式
-jjyy-jjyy(能吃能睡);
2008-5-12
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11, 你怎么记这么清楚?
-love10000year(爱你一万年);
2008-5-12
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什么是“寄意似不县”???
-zhangqilxf(双子心-今夕何夕);
2008-5-12
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顶一个 ,虽然现在开始瞻前顾后
-oxteeth(freewood);
2008-5-12
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加条命。。。
-zhangqilxf(双子心-今夕何夕);
2008-5-12
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001在list消失,从此不再接触,太厉害了
-oxteeth(freewood);
2008-5-12
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水手派来提高人气的~~~~~~~~
-jjyy-jjyy(能吃能睡);
2008-5-12
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鱼跃龙门仙骨去,鹿迁桃洞道风端 这两句好像多余
-conghua1(打卤面);
2008-5-12
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多余吗???这是心潭近况呀。。。。。。
-zhangqilxf(双子心-今夕何夕);
2008-5-12
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g(oo)d
-blue_bird(蓝鸢);
2008-5-12
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。。。落旗。。。玛丽通关。。。
-zhangqilxf(双子心-今夕何夕);
2008-5-12
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u r 1 time better than jjyy, 10 times better than lookaround, 100 times better than me
-blue_bird(蓝鸢);
2008-5-12
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1000 times worse than me
-conghua1(炸虾酱);
2008-5-12
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conghua001
-blue_bird(蓝鸢);
2008-5-12
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hehe, where is the knife? I wanna kill myself...
-zhangqilxf(双子心-今夕何夕);
2008-5-12
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kill conhua first
-blue_bird(蓝鸢);
2008-5-12
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eat conhua first 。。。多灾多难的2008。。。
-zhangqilxf(双子心-今夕何夕);
2008-5-12
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reminds me 1976, something will happen soon
-blue_bird(蓝鸢);
2008-5-12
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